Dean saves a crazy person that walks out into traffic. His reward, a doll for his girlfriend, seems strange at first, but he eventually figures out how it works.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.25
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 2.75
- Technical: 3.00
xyz
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Though the middle and end part felt a bit too rushed, it's a good story altogether
karen
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I had to copy this into a word document to make any sense. The paragraphs were fine then. I reallly like the premise of this. It felt kind of rushed... maybe more description?
I did like it though.
keep writing!
Wolf
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Great premise, although it would have been fun if the build up had been a bit slower.
Anon
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Your program goofed the formatting and has left your story unreadable due to no paragraph breaks.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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