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The Overflowing Bra

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Suit, The
A lonely inventor creates a virtual reality suit for exercising, with surprisingly effective results.
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 you are realy good
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5 
realy good, your a good writer
 h07shot
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5 
wow that was the best storie i have seen in a while keep writing E-MAIL me at beckercoleman123@hotmail.com
 JEO
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 3 
I thogt it was really good...
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