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The Overflowing Bra

Leroy
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Sparkplug of Power 1
Leroy finds a magic Sparkplug that lets him alter reality. He uses it to put himself into a special Ranma movie.
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Leroy
Overall= 1, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

As a matter of fact, yes, yes I was. Drugs and copius ammounts of alcohol. Combine that with the fact that I wrote this over a series of different days and kind of forgot where I was going with it, and you get a mess like this. I'm getting better, now that I can only get my hands on caffiene, nicotine, and alcohol, but I'm still not a pro. Never will be.

DarkHeart
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I try not to make personal slurs against authors when I make a comment, but I have to ask. Were you on drugs when you wrote this? It was so badly disjointed it was hard to follow.

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