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The Overflowing Bra

Kuri Manifika
Alison's Story
Alison tries the new Flintstones Chewable Breast Enhancers. No, I am not making this up!
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 2

This was funny and totally enjoyable. The little comments showing the cliche's added a sincere touch to it.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

This is a really cool fic. Like Billy said, your running commentary made this enjoyable, and it put a smirk on my face. Your writing style lacks very little, though I do prefer the more serious side of BE. Alison is rounded out just enough (no pun intended LOL) to get the gist for sake of this story. It's a one-timer, so getting to know her on the level that would be included in a novel is a bad idea. Very nice overall.

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