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The Overflowing Bra

Kraken de Polar
SRU: Part Time Witch
William Quincy, the would-be heir to the cosmetics empire "Touch of the Succubus," wishes to run the family company one day. There's just one problem - His mother would never turn over the company to a man! William searches high and low for a mysterious store that might be able to help him make a change. Will he find what he's looking at the mysterious shop, or do the fates have bigger plans for him?
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Miss Lany
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

I really love the premise for this. The SRUniverse has become pretty ridiculous and stale for me, but this is very refreshing to see characters and plot elements genre savvy enough to play around with that and have a realistic protagonist for once.

The actual BE scenes were also good. Nothing mind blowing, and they kind of just come and go as vignettes told through this story framing, but still more than enough to keep you interested. Keep up the good work!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Engaging characters and playful exploration; really nice!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Love the premise. Great quality and a fun story.
Would have liked to know what happens to customers helped, like the love potion, if only a brief blurb.
Hope to see this continued

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Fun story to read

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