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Secretagentmann
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The Gift Chapter 5 Biker Babe
After the last two chapters which included gender changes and BE, Sam is a guy again, but a biker chick at the bar turns him into her personal fantasy.
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Secretagentmann
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Thanks for your input. I believe the series will end with the hero learning so much from his experiences becoming a dynamic person who understands people, history and especially woman on a whole new level allowing his reality be exactly as he imagines it. Just like the people he encounters only permanent

Genesis
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Really enjoying the Story, would like more Be and women getting to larger proportions but good work. Looking forward to next chapter

Roid Abuser
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Still fantastic.

The only thing I would say (and I can't believe I am saying it, but you've got such a good concept here) is a bit more exposition.

So far, the story kind of reminds me of one of those stories where the protagonist goes from one unlikely adventure to the next, but there is no continuity of characters except the protagonist -- there is a word for it, but I've forgotten it. Kind of akin to the Voyages of Ulysses/ the Odyssey, where he went from one disaster to the next, but even that had a thread to keep it all together.


I'd respectfully get your hero to get a handle (sort of) on his powers or perhaps the opposite -- stuck in a form perhaps of his choosing, perhaps not. Or perhaps have his mind be intact, but stuck in the body of some other person's dream person.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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