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The Overflowing Bra

Limitless Spheres Labs
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Super Saline Lottery
"Who won the 999th edition of Super Saline Lottery? Whose tits will be pumped with astonishing amounts of saline? Will it be enough to satisfy the winning girl? See for yourself!"
This is a story of unbelievably huge tits, extreme implant overfilling and insane boobie greed. For fake boobs lovers only!
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Bubs
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 5

I have a few issues with this story.

First, the plot hinges on the premise that saline is somehow a valuable commodity. They don't want to give her the injections, not because it's dangerous or she doesn't deserve them, but because somehow there's a limited amount of saline to put in breasts. Saline is literally salt and water, two of the most common substances on earth.

Second, the descriptions of breast size were lacking. Sure, knowing how big a breast is in ml or cc is technically accurate, but is nearly impossible to visualize. Artificial breasts are sperical, right? Just give us the diameter and tell us how much they weighed. Other writers do this, but not because it's cliche, but because it works.

Third, there are no downsides to her expansion. She doesn't buckle under the weight, or feel like her skin is going to break as her breasts expand further than they ever should have. Show her feeling like she's bitten of more than she can chew or wonder if she's going to succeed.

Fourth, I just didn't care for the main character. We are shown a character in the beginning that I thought we would root for, then the story immediately shifts to a stuck up bitch who takes everything she can when she can. I want to see girls like that get their comeuppance. Instead of having her be excited at the amount that's going to be pumped into her breasts, have her excited at first, but when she finds out how much the final amount is, have her get nervous because she's not sure if she can take it, but she can't back out now or else she'll lose face. Have her succeed, but she doesn't know how she'll live now.

In this story's defense, the concept is unique enough, it just needed better execution. As well, the writing and grammar is good. There are many stories here that are nearly unreadable, but this was very neatly done. I hope this doesn't dissuade you from writing. I want to read what you have next, just be sure to include better descriptions and some proper obstacles for your characters. The more I can buy into a story, the more I can suspend my disbelief.

LeFrenchFox
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

An excellent story. I was a bit surprised how the story turned around another character than the one we started with, but the it gives us a good tease about a sequel of this.
The characters, their reactions and the twist are well written and I really want to see what happen next.
Good job !

Breastfanatic~
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Super hot, I loved it, would have liked a few more comparisons to objects and such instead of CC numbers and weight but still, excellent :P

Sir Crazy Wolf
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Nothing makes a story hotter than a girl who is never satisfied no matter how big she gets. Now I'm in suspense waiting for the sequel.

deux_anges
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This is a fantastic implant inflation-based story. Certainly the best I've read in a couple of years. It reminded me a lot of Adam Plantz's work.

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