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The Overflowing Bra

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Chilli Oil
When Suzy picks out a massage oil from the supermarket, she certainly gets a bang for her buck, or at least she plans to.
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Gman001
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Well mini-GTS needs a lot more love on this site...so this is a great work in that genre. Be nice to have the two lovers have SOME interaction but as a pure expansion scene this is written very well. Keep up your great work!

Azilia
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

TL;DR: Enjoyable but short. A great pure-expansion story.

I think this is a great story for this site. It may not be exactly what I am looking for as I enjoy a fair amount of story. That being said, for a story whose sole purpose was to show titillating expansion and raunchy daydreams this was spectacular. Your style is very easy to read and I can tell you're an excellent writer. All in all I did enjoy the story despite its unfortunately short length.

A few critiques though:

The characters were fairly simple although Suzy was quite likable. Once again though, it's in the context of a straight forward expansion story so the character depth doesn't really matter.

BE Description was slightly lacking. I didn't really have a feel for how large she was. Though I suppose that's the point as the reader is to interpret the vague sizes how they wise. Regardless, I would just recommend perhaps detailing small checkpoints she reaches. Her breasts are as large as oranges, then grapefruit, etc, etc. Though once again, as the story was short there wasn't as much space to really flesh out every minute detail.

My last critique is that it was too damn short! What was there was enjoyable but it does leave me with a yearning for more!

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