The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Wants and Needs
"When your body wants something, it lets you know." But what happens when your body decides it needs something completely insane? Corey finds out as he discovers he's turning into a girl. But not ALL of him is changing, and as others discover this fact their own hidden wants start to come out of the woodwork.
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Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Super hot.  Spirals out of control.
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I think this will have to go down as one of the greatest stories on this site. My only complaint is probably the same as everyone else in that the ending was a bit rushed and you could've explored some of the characters and their reactions more. But beside this the story was absolutely brilliant from start to end. 
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5


Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Great Story (I don't even like herms and I read the whole thing), but I was personally disappointed by the 'preg' tag when the relevant content was so shallow compared to fetish fuel and long/skirt, which are still some of my favorite stories here today.

On criticism that actually means something, I'd agree with the others above in the assertion that things escalated really quickly.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Dammit Mich, you've done it again. You continue to be by far and away one of the best writers on this site. Over the years your grip on writing erotic fiction has gone from good to great to grandmaster, and I'm really enjoying these protracted stories of yours, where the lead is slowly corrupted. Everyone else has already expressed my only critique, which is you seemed to fast forward over the really fun stuff at the end. Story length getting you down? Running out of steam? Maybe breaking it up into a two parter would have helped. Still, excellent work. Hope to see more work from you in the future. Perhaps you could find a way to have all these strange occurrences fit into one universe...

Lexi Kiss
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

while your stories never fail to please, and i absolutely love the expansion and surreal transformation aspects of your stories, because they are very much in line with my own related kinks, i do wish the story hadn't been dummed up at the end. but i guess a person can only write so much sometimes. i would have left it open to additional parts, as you have in the past.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Very enjoyable; it felt a bit like too much, too quickly, though. The story never slows down enough to allow any real consequences to occur, and when they become inevitable it simply evolves in to a hand-wave at the end of the story.

While I enjoyed the early transformation and development, as well as the first three encounters, I would have enjoyed it more with more time and more exploration of the characters and their relations -- there was definitely room to say carry the arcs of each of Whitney, Jerry, and Jessie and how they relate to Corey, as well as the conflict that was set up between Corey and society-at-large/school-in-particular and some sort of plot with the doctor (as it's very trying on suspension of disbelief that no-one argues about putting Corey in to some sort of observation).

That said, while the language and presentation feels very natural, and the plot progresses quite well for stroke fiction. I personally would have preferred more reactions and maybe more restrained (or at least slower) growth -- but I quite enjoyed the piece, and look forward to reading more from Mich.

The Light Fantastic
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Amazing. Absolutely did not anticipate where it was going to be by the end, but the level of "normal life grappling with these changes" up to that point was astounding.

A little rushed at the end, as others have said, but far and above pretty much any other story on this site. Well done!

Lily Bunny
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I am going to have to agree with everyone else. I was ready to claim that this was one of my favorite pieces of growth/transformation fetish stories, but that ending was rather rushed. I would have loved to see the transformations that were listed in the ending go on in greater detail. Also, I personally am not a fan of the whole "My fetish breaks the universe" story lines, but to each their own.

Still a fantastic story.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I just want to mention that these are essentially my fantasies writ large across my screen; as a transgirl, I've fantasized about scenarios eerily similar to these: being exaggeratedly feminine, still sporting that one important element of manhood, and most of all having people lust for me specifically -for- those things.

There were characters and a plot I guess, I dunno, I wasn't paying attention; I was more distracted by seeing my literal fantasies on the screen. Please keep writing.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Very well put together, and particularly like the first half. I love slow burns that let character grapple with their situations. As others have noted, it gets a bit rushed and overstuffed towards the end.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Overall great read. Feels a little rushed at the end.
It is just a porn story but the characters were a little bit flat to me.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Fuuuuuuuu, now I have to choose between this and Fetish Fuel as my favorite story on TOB. There's some fetishes in here I don't even *like* and you managed to make them appealing to me.

You need an illustrator, someone to hep bring these stories to life visually, they're just that awesome. :D :D :D

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Great read!

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