The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Swogrider
r1998rrhof95@yahoo.com
Codex
Two best friends find a special book in a magic shop. Sexy hijinks ensue.
Average Scores:

ANONYMOUS
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Leaves you wanting more...
Mukul
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
One of my all time favourites
Chrisyohn
Overall= 2, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Wow so many comments. This is unheard of... Anyway, do you ever assume what the author is like based on their story? Since no one in this story has sex yet everyone is horny and the whole focus is on visualphysical changes, my assumption is the author is a shy male. Probably virgin. I couldn't finish the story. Ripped off SRU and other typical settings without giving credit too. Fun story but not enough depth 
BB47
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Good stuff.  However, I didn't finish the story.  Too drawn out.  I like long stories, but this one kept frustrating me for some reason.
Diincendio
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
THE best transformation story out there!rnI know its long, and it couldve been divided into smaller chapters, but Im still hoping for a sequel!rn
FireFox
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Fantastic story  Definitely one of my favorites  Hope we get more content from you
Sirmunchalot
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Absolutely incredible story!The length, pacing, and plot were amazing. The best part is that the sexy stuff didn't detract from it at all! The length was impressive and, unlike others on here, didn't leave long, bonerkilling spaces of all plot no boobs. I wish I could be a little more constructive with my review, but frankly your page represents my three favorite stories on the website!
TLW
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

Okay, so tiny content spoilers ahead, nothing plot related though,

This was a thoroughly enjoyable read. Really, can't credit you enough for writing a story composed almost entirely of sexual transformations and lots of nakedness that didn't come across as smut with which to get your jollies. The characters were pretty solid and the descriptions, if a little lacking, didn't feel rushed like they can be in rapid and multiple transformation stories. You don't get full marks there though, for teasing a herm fan with not quite enough action. I think that's what I enjoyed most about the story, it barely scratched the surface of hardcore, despite coming tantalisingly close.

The changing perspectives was well done, tricky to pull off without the personas blurring together. It added a different twist to it all that I wasn't expecting to see.

The only gripe I have, and it was really quite a jarring problem, were the names Sam and Tom switching at random in the story. Threw me for a loop the first time and I had to go back to the start to see if it was maybe part of Bran's full name, then it kept on happening. Seriously, almost made me want to go through the hassle of turning off the read only and find/replacing the problem. Except for a couple of other simple typos though, blooming well written. Still marking you down for it though, because gah!

Anyway, I look forwards to any other stories you do. Keep up the good work

Owl
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

This has to be one of the best stories I've read here.

I only took one point off because halfway through the story, Sam is referred to as Tom for some reason. It was a little jarring from an otherwise amazing read.

I'm really looking forward to what you write next; this hit me in all the right spots.

TheEarl
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Excellent long-form story. The characters are interesting (and actually have characterisation) and the transformations are varied, creative and well-written. Plus you get full marks for a story with mind-control that actually cares about consent - made it much more sexy for me as I didn't feel dirty about enjoying it.

I'm used to stories where I either have to ignore bad writing, awful attitudes to consent/women-in-general, or zero characterisation and it's lovely to find one where I don't. One of the best stories I've read in a long time - please continue writing, as I want to read more of your work.

The Earl

PS. And sorry, you did lose a point for the Sam/Tom thing.

Mocha Jones
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Yeah Sam/Tom threw me at one point but it's okay. I'm not generally a BE fan but I enjoyed the other aspects to your story. There was a lot packed in there but it didn't feel overwhelming.

My only criticism, and perhaps it's not really very relevant to the story you were trying to tell, is that a character grows a penis and then does not get to stick it into anyone! That was a bit of unfulfilled tease for me. But otherwise a great story and very impressive. Keep up the good work - would love to read more stuff from you, particularly in non-BE genre.

CrashO
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Name switch threw me hard. Other than that, really well written, kinda bummed out futa/preg stuff was in such small detail and no sexytimes with it. Liked giving her a huge cock while she had the lie curse, was funny imagining it. Pretty compelling plot even if it was mostly "and then hijinks" for the first third.

The Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I hope you make a sequel to this.

Tailsko
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

All in all, an excellent work. Would read again and again. The Tom/Sam thing was VERY confusing, and lost ya two points in this review. I actually had to stop and reread to catch what happened there. Other than that, bravo, and keep writing please!

jak8714
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I agree with TLW. The stories tendency to switch the names Tom and Sam was annoying and distracting. I am also somewhat disappointed with the average sizes featured in the stories; I am very much a proponent of 'bigger is better'.

With all the annoying complaints out of the way, I really, really, enjoyed this story. I rate this as just below some of the better published authors I read, and I have no stronger compliment. I am very much looking forward to a sequel, and will be disappointed if you do not make one. It really deserves it.

Hark
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

One of the best stories on the site. Thanks, and keep writing!

TCFD
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

A great story. I loved the mix of hypnosis and magic. However, the ending was even better because I thought the spell book use kinda got old, along with the fact that all the magic was known ahead of time. In otherwords: it was hot, but the ending was hotter - unknown what she was going to do, definitely non-consensual, mischievous with a hot streak. Please continue this story where it left off.

DMDD
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Wow! Definitely my favorite story in a long time. I immediately came back and searched for your name to see what else you had available. I'm excited to read more!

My only gripes are the switching of Tom/Sam (also noted by other readers), and lack of further description of the transformations. It always felt like just when some of them were getting good, it was over.

I'm super excited to see what you write next. I would love a sequel to this too! The pranking and dares really helped keep it fresh and fun for me.

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Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

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Coldangrystar
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This story had just the right kinks, just enough characterization, just enough fantasy element to make it internally consistent, just enough boobega.

Just the best.

COMMENTER ON BOOB STORY
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

please write more.

Raerae
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Amazing amazing amazing. Loved the characters and their interactions along with the playful dialogue. This is one of the best stories I've read in a long time. Please make more and keep up the amazing work!

Nux
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Amazing story, really liked what you did with the characters, they had great believable personalities and reactions and were generally well written and enjoyable.

I feel there is a lot more to tell for more transforms or changes, through this story was very long with great content. I would like more detail in some of the transformations, or to have them drawn out a bit.

REALLY like that you kept things in consent, and the characters were enjoying themselves, really increased my enjoyment too.

One critique, might be important if you go for a sequel: I felt that making Julie god-like at the end kind of flattens the story out. Having to use the book and interact with each other and Bran with rules and methods added a lot, if she can just think things into being limitlessly it makes things much more boring in my opinion.

Overall one of my favorite, and I believe objectively best written pieces I have found on this archive. Please, PLEASE write more! Your work is amazing.

Multibooblover
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This story was awesome! Very well developed characters and plot as well as some sexy transformations. Can't wait to read more from you!

Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

This is a great story.

It reminds me, in theme and writing style, of one I read long ago, title "Rhyme Master" (well, the filename was "Rymhe Master", but...). That was similarly excellent.

jonx22
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

i loved it!
i would personaly enjoy it if more weird transformations happened

Unfamed
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

best story i've read in a very long time

xtra123
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

More please.

anon867530
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

First off, don't be fooled with my ratings for Technical and Characters being 4. This was by far one of the best amateur stories I've read in a long time. Personally, it pushed all my buttons. Nothing was too outrageous, yet at the same time it was ridiculous enough to entertain me to the last bit. Funny as hell. I personally enjoyed the parts where they don't realize they're naked. And the bimbo parts. I just really like mind alteration, it's a fun trait to mess with in these stories.
I do have some comments about the style, but it's very minimal. I feel like the characters could have used some fleshing out. Sam and Bran were the only ones I could tell when they were speaking if I wasn't told it was them, so Julie and Emma could have had a bit more development. Speaking of which, I feel like Julie's rage at the end seemed abrupt. If she showed more annoyance over time, with the mirror being the final straw, it might have had some better pacing as well as some more character development for Julie. Finally, and this is just a personal tick of mine, you give Julie all of these powers at the end, this massive revelation, but after just an explanation on what she now has and light use, you leave it at that. It's unsettling to me, because I feel like I'm missing out on a lot more hijinks that could have occured with her new high-power magic. I don't have a solution for this though, besides writing a sequel.
Overall, I'm really pleased with the quality of this writing. I don't normally read 150+ page stories from this site, but somehow you had me breezing through it wishing for more. Amazing work, keep it up. And make sure next time you don't start calling a character "Tom" halfway in next time ;)

TLW
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Yay, you fixed it, now to give it the score it deserves. Looking forward to what you write next.

Bubs
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This is one of the longest stories I've read on here, but it is packed with content. I got off 4 times on my first read through this. Pretty damn good story. I read the version where Sam's name switch to Tom half way through, but if this is the one where the author fixed that error then I'll give it a 5 for technical quality. I like how they left a lot of the decisions for the transformations up to each other, and made games out of it. It gets boring when people change themselves to whatever they want whenever they want it. I don't like when she people change completely against your will, because it starts to feel a bit rapey. I do like when people get into something, but it doesn't quite turn out the way they expect. Those twists are so hot.

Jok
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Has to be one of the best stories i've read in a while
Kept me entertained all the way through
The descriptions were just about long enough ( Any longer may have stretched the story out too much, but then again maybe that would have been even better)
The characters were possibly what drew my attention most, they seem to fit very well together and just make this story much more entertaining than most
Aaaaaannddd.. finally technically. very easy to read, not many errors, never enough to be distracting or take away from the awesomenesss.

Please keep it up, feel like i just found a new source of kickass stories.

Owl
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Please write more. This was amazing.

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