The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

BilltheDemon
billthedemonic@gmail.com
The Devil's Plaything corrected
I hope this is better, if y'all like it, I'll release the 2nd part, which I've already written.
Average Scores:

The Dude
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Great story... Keep it going ... Great story can't wait for part 2... Then 3 and 4 ;)

ASR
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 2

I really enjoyed everything about this story, especially the concept. Your descriptions of the actual process were fantastic. Like the other raters before me I was a bit distracted by the unpolished writing, but I think you have great promise if you keep at it. Looking forward to part 2!

Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2

A very good start! The story itself is excellent but you're in desperate need of a spellcheck and a proofreader. I know we aren't aiming for professional publication quality here but the problems distract from enjoyment of the story.

CleavageCuddler
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Seems like you just need to polish up some of the grammar. All-in-all a great story. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.

Angry Bird
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

I believe there is always room for improvement in writing no matter what level of skill you are at. Keep working at it! This is great stuff, I love it and can't wait for you to post the next part of this story! Thanks for sharing

jj
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

love it!

its really thrilling. please more with the same style!

kung fu ass & tits style
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

pretty good wish people would do the subtle changes to body by others story types more

Beachball boobs
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 2

Very good story, would love to read more! BUT please use spell check...that was my only problem!

Anon
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Part 2 Please, I second "Hey"

hey
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Hey

Post the next part

Do it.

Erisian
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Basically, I have nothing purely negative to say. You're writing seems like it's unpolished, but I hope you just take that as encouragement to keep doing it. This story has the potential to be EXTREMELY hot, it's a great kinky premise. Thanks for writing!

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