The Overflowing Bra

The text formatting if you load it in windows notepad doesn't show the line breaks properly.  I advise anyone reading this story to open it in wordpad instead which will handle line breaks properly.
There's inconsistent punctuation, namely the quotes.  Sometimes stuff being spoken has single quotes, sometimes double quotes.  Few homophone related errors too, such as pore instead of pour.
Looking past the editorial issues, the actual characters and growth is quite enjoyable, and I enjoyed reading the story once I managed to get past the technical issues.  I wouldn't mind seeing where round 2 would lead.

enjoyed the story.  looking forward to future work!

It's a fun read, if a bit difficult with how it's presented. There's a lot of writing packed in with very few paragraph breaks but that's a minor complaint and easily rectified personally.

I forgot to add a description! Silly me! I'll add a rating and give it all ones, hope that doesn't deter anyone. Ah well, that's what I get for rushing!
This is an RP I did with a fellow expansion writer named Nairny. This was over the course of several weeks, and was a blast to write with him. The story follows two women who find a magic book at a library and go on to use several spells upon each other, panicking all the way.