After taking a girl home after a date, a guy finds his enormous penis has a willing - and growing - partner to play with.
This is my first attempt at a BE story - all comments welcome!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.18
- BE: 3.82
- Characters: 3.73
- Technical: 3.55
Razor
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
You did really great for your first time. I particularly like how you portrayed a guy as a caring partner instead of a misogynistic ass. Great story which left me wanting more.
Fox
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Wow a great read. No paragraph issue(I use a mac). This is one of the better stories that have been uploaded here the past few months. Write on my man, write on.
Fake-Name
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
It has paragraphs. They're just done using Mac/Unix line endings.
If you open this in windows notepad, it will show as a giant block of text. You need to use a text editor that is smart enough to understand multiple text file styles. I like notepad++, but there are lots of options.
Collector
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
As with most posters, the huge wall of text is a major issue. I would like to say, however that the story is terrific, well described, and well written. I would read more.
Elbee
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
No Paragraphs....Just a sloid block of text. Not even going to try to read it!
MrX
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I'm not sure what you're going on about with paragraphs. I saw plenty of them. Nice story.
Jc
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Good story, not enough size stories.
Diablos97
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
Good read, except it was a giant wall of text. If you separated it out into paragraphs, it'd be easier to read for sure.
Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Very nice first story. Thanks for the read!
mguidrox
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Paragraphs. Other than that well written.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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