The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Alex Wright was an ordinary guy in a mundane world. But, one day after a car accident, he finds himself, the only human suddenly in a world full of large breasted elves. Many sexual adventures begin for him afterwards.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Learn English. Whenever I come across a phrase like, "more better", I cringe. It's just "better". You don't need to put more ahead of words like "better, smellier, stinkier". "More" is already implied in this type of adjective. I have yet to see "most best" in there, but I wouldn't be surprised. This is elementary school grammar. Use a grammar checker before publishing.

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Not perfect, and not as much BE focus as I would have liked, but overall a good read.

Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Just read this one since I was going to read Elfworld 2. The lack of BE was disapointing as this is the "Definitive BE Story Archive", I expect any stories posted to have actual BE. Overall this brought the story down for me, I couldn't get into it once I realized after scanning through that there was zero to no BE.

Mr. GreyMan
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I must say I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. Likable characters and upbeat feel all around. Despite what I say next I sincerely hope you continue it, but at the same time doubt. Often times when people leave a story as you have they don't follow through with more. You're at an escalation point with this tail but that might mean you'll have trouble writing the next part, depending. I do hope that's not the case; I think I will quite enjoy what comes next.

However, I did find the bit at the end a little... shall we say "forced." It did not seem to flow well with the rest of the story. Yes, there was the foreshadowing at the start but even that seemed at odds with the rest of it. Almost like you just added it to get into the MC archives or something. The story takes more or less a dark turn there at the end when he states figuring out his destiny to -what I assume- was to wipe out the elven race by supplanting them with humans. I like a good dark tail -all my stories are dark- but it did not seem to fit with the happy and rather nice main character. He just did not seem like the kind of bloke that would go around enslaving elves.

That being said, I would love to read him going around enslaving elves.

Mr. GreyMan

Overall= 5, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Lack of BE, but rest was awesome.
Please continue.

Overall= 5, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 5


This was a grand read. only concern: the lack of B.E.

But then....a somewhat weird world where a P-cup bra size and a backside you can serve dinner on is common place and a girl with the physique of Olive Oyl is seen a Porn Star HOT was truely an interesting twist. And the fact that the hero is a nice guy in what could be commonly referred to as the LUCKY BASTARD situation gives this novel an almost anime-like quality that i( and i be quite a few other) find endearing.

BE or NO BE this is a win and from what i can see it can only get better.

Please continue...
as story this good can stop at just one installment!!


Overall= 5, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I actually really liked it and that's quite rare with stories from here. The Setting was nice enough although I'd imagine the world would differ a bit more from ours.
Two more things the explanation of a human in elfworld was a bit weak (he became a human because he wished really hard?) and I would expect someone in his situation to freak out a bit more.
But like I said the Story is quite good, the Mind Control is very subtle (that's a plus), the sex fits smoothly and the plot is Interesting. I'd be disappointed if there won't be a sequel.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

awesome, just awesome

Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Great story. Started off really strong, but I started losing interest about half way through. I just personally wasnt into the direction it took.
Like noted, no BE, but good regardless.

Overall= 5, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I second everything BB47 said, with some exceptions that follow.

I think the mc part of the story makes sense with the direction the story has gone so far. The women aren't becoming bimbos (Kelly might be the exception, not enough material to make a conclusive argument).

This is easily one of the best things I've ever read here: BE or no-BE.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I would like to see some BE in this series, Maybe as they have sex that they expand during sex then return to normal after, or something like that. Maybe a few more women with small breast begin to expand. Over all, excellent literature keep it coming.

Deux Anges
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Excellent writing, one of the few stories in which I actually read it rather than just skimming. The characters are likeable and the premise of a parallel universe was very interesting. I like big boobs and your descriptions are pretty good so the lack of BE did not detract at all.
The last part about mind control was a bit jarring though, and changed the basic story drastically (although it did explain some of the things that I thought were a bit odd earlier, like why they have so many orgasms).
I do wonder though where the story will go from here. So far the protagonist could explain his strange behaviour and appearance on his accident. But what happens when all his offspring also look human? How will he keep this secret then? Also, will be seeing lots of pregnancy and belly expansion? :)

Overall= 5, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Though this story lacked any kind BE. It managed to portray such an awesome fantasy that the missing BE...wasn't missed.

Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

The thing about breast expansion is that it changes a woman from being static to dynamic. It puts her in a state of change. In most of the stories on this site, the women go through transformations that increase their bust sizes up to (or beyond) our fantasies.
Don't get me wrong.. big boobs are great! We just like witnessing the changes. The changes in this story are more psychological. The women go from hating their big breasts to loving them.

That being said, I read this entire story all the way through with only a little bit of skimming. Kudos on the technical quality. Good job on the characters. Great job on the setting and dimensional reality swap.. very cool! I liked all the sex scenes.. I get it.. it's very empowering.. but just remember, there's something about a BE reader that makes them want physical changes to occur.. not just emotional.

I liked your stance on sex. It was cool that the main character was good in the sack and had great 'staying' power. I also thought it was interesting that the girls would count their orgasms.. in a way, the orgasm count was used as an erotic substitution to bust size incremental size changes. What I mean, is that in other stories, you'll note that the authors will incrementally increase boob sizes as a sort of competition when a man is screwing them all like in your story.

Honestly, if you wanted to make this story BE-compatible, I would have reduced all of the initial Breast sizes down to big, but not extreme, and then made it so that AFTER he had multi-sex magical sex with two women that when he went back to a single woman, the magic would be too much and it would cause her boobs to absorb the extra magic and increase in size very slowly. So the story would basically be the same up until he tapped his "mom" and girlfriend at the same time and got dizzy. From that point on, his powers would grow and so would they. The more girls, the more power, the more changes. Even throw in a little PE for fun.

In my opinion, the magic scroll from the elders pushed the last scene into mind-control. It was hot, because you introduced a new plot element, but it was also mc, so.. just be careful unless that is the direction you wanted to go. I would have rather left Kelly's bitchy attitude as an interesting counterpoint to the other obsessed women. It would have been fun to see her try to emotionally balance her cocklust with her attitude and the other elven women. Once again, if the magic could actually induce changes.. I'd love to see Kelly's boobs and ass grow once she got exposed to his greater power. (it's not too late to add it into the future storyline.. wink wink, hint hint.) - of course, you could be waiting until they all get pregnant before you grow them bigger.

Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Very promising beginning though the descriptions of how many orgasms they had do get a bit repetitive at times. Also lacks any sort of expansion.

I do hope you write more and I'd especially love some very big/multiple child pregnancies and what kind of breast expansion being pregnant would cause for the elves.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Good work. As others noted, there is no actual BE, just busty girls and sex. A little repetitive in the sex, maybe if there was more description/dialog in each sex scene and then fewer scenes, each one would be more memorable.

Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Love the writing. Though there aren't any type of expansion, it would be good to add that in, in your next one, hopefully the continuation of this story. Very nice details also, I'm not sure if it'll be the same for others, but I feel like i was actually watching it happen while I read the story. So please keep them coming!!!!!!

Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Well written and interesting, but completely lacking in any form of expansion.

Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I really enjoyed the story, even though I was skeptical on the elf thing, it was really good. I look forward to it being continued.

Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 2

The dialog, world and characters are all ridiculous, the actual writing is terrible and repetitive and it has no expansion at all. Still not the worst, but near the bottom.

Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Aside from the fact that there's no actual expansion, everything else is basically sex, sex, and more sex. I honestly found myself getting bored and skipping through most of it to find out if anything else happened. It does (won't spoil it for you), but I don't think it justifies 120 pages of sex and 30 pages of actual story.

Overall= 5, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Everything is good... aside from the lack of expanding boobies. I do look forward to future chapters.

Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

no be but great alt universe story

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

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