Yoga-loving Odetta Lucessi gets stung...
and stung...
and stung...
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.25
- BE: 3.25
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 3.00
Chamomile Flea
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
I like the first page or two, the caps lock made it unreadable though so I stopped. :(
Matt
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Wish we could have had more expansion, breasts and belly, but the story was well written. I see the caps lock was corrected (or my OpenOffice program did that...). It was well done, and well written.
The Preve
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Folks, caps lock wasn't supposed to happen. I don't know what happened but I'll see if I can post a corrected version.
The Dark Trianni
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
This was a pretty good and very interesting read if I had to say so myself. It was lacking in some description of the growth process--the pot calling the kettle black there--but it wasn't cripplingly so. I was able to get an idea and that's what counts. Some grammar here and there, but nothing a little more proofreading can't weed out. One major gripe though; HOW EVERY OTHER PARAGRAPH WAS CAPS-LOCKED. IT WAS MORE THAN A LITTLE DISTRACTING AND I BET THIS PART OF THE COMMENT JUST POPS RIGHT AT YOU AND MAKES YOU THINK I'M SCREAMING. I JUST DON'T SEE THE POINT OF IT. MILD DISTRACTION ASIDE, I would recommend this to those that enjoy the obscure. :D
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