The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Sarah Finds Satisfaction
Sarah is an average girl in an average world which tends to pass her by.  Up until recently, she has had trouble attracting guys.  But after a random act of kindness, her world is about to change (to her surprise) for the better.

My first story - I hope you enjoy it!
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Liked it...Liked it a lot!

Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Excellent story and truly unexpected.

If there is one complaint, it was that it was TOO SHORT.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

For a first try, this is very well done. I hope to see more from you in the future.

I have nothing to 'nitpick' about save for a few grammar errors and simple mistakes.

Your style is clean and straightforward, keep it up!

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Liked this story a lot. Couple of small errors but did notice you had posted a 'corrected' version - had already downloaded and read this version. Good grammar and overall a top effort for a first posting.

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Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

It was good, but needed more in depth description and larger proprtions, especially her butt and bust.

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

Two nit-picking points:
1) Why is her stride shorter when she has longer legs?
2) A 34-28-34 figure is NOT hourglass; the chest/hip measurement must be 50% more than the waist measurement.

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BE Description (Detail, quantity, quality)
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Characters (Descriptions, likeability)
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Technical Quality (Writing style, grammar, etc.)
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