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This is a sketch aimed at a feedback.... All ideas, suggestions, feedbacks and criticism please send to me - magicelvira13@gmail.com
This short story may contain content unappropriated for normal person, be aware!!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 1.00
- BE: 2.50
- Characters: 1.00
- Technical: 2.50
BB47
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
Exploding breasts. Don't believe me?.. here's a quote from the story: "Miranda let out one last scream as her breasts exploded like balloons spraying implanted liquid all over the room". . .. why? why? why? .. plus it's only 2 pages long.
Adama
Overall= 1, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
Sorry, exploding breasts? And one girl savagely mutilates another one just because she's vain, and her victim is the villain? Not to mention no justification for the final expansion. Maybe others will like this, but not my cup of tea.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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