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Alex, an average and skinny working girl, has her breast start expanding out of no where whenever she ever eats and it causes some unexpected results.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.14
- BE: 3.14
- Characters: 2.29
- Technical: 2.14
Dreginy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
It had a few grammar mistakes mistakes and the story telling wasn't all that great..but I don't care about that stuff when reading BE stories xD I'm looking strictly for good BE and this story delivers :P I love it !
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
"Alex woke up with freight"
Thanks for making the world a much dumber place.
BoobCrafter
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
The weird architectural breast size comparisons ("the size of living rooms"?!), bad grammar and misspellings ("in the Nevada dessert"), and the occasional totally-incomprehensible sentence ("We’re still not sure how her breasts developed this procedure of gather all food intakes.") really were distracting. Would be passable with a good edit round.
GODofMOUSSE
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
It was okay. Just the grammar and the storytelling need to be done a bit better, but that's an easy fix!
brit
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Grammar and spelling need a lot of work. Poor story telling; felt like a bunch of random thoughts about what the character was doing, rather than a narrative through her experience.
Ninja In The Night
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
This story had BE, boy did it have BE. But the main character seemed quite flawed. I also noticed several errors of spelling and grammar in the story itself. I did enjoy it, but it needs a bit more work before it becomes a gem. Great start though.
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Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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