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A man's desperate experiment with a prototype aphrodisiac goes far, far beyond his expectations.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.26
- BE: 4.16
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.42
Bb47
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Hot! Just wish he hadn't ended up practically brain dead.
PeterBE
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Viddaric
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Dispite what my review of Hoferatu may imply, I don't grade lightly. Maybe chemical BE just isn't my style, but this one just didn't do it for me. Like how the bad guy turns into a sex monkey at the end though.
SMAP
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Overall a quite good story. Everything was set up quite nicely and flowed well, although there were times that I thought that the jumps (although followable) were perhaps a bit much, or at inopportune times.
The BE and sex were quite good, and overall the story was definitely one of the best submitted in a while. Hoping to see more from you in the future.
the czar
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
i would love to see and expansion on the whole cupids arrow formula. i feel there are a lot of things you could do with this story
whiffle40
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
William Foster
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
What a great short story!
Could you please contact me at admin.rte23@gmail.com about illustrating your next story?
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I enjoyed the story, though I wish it had been a little bit longer.
Blamandude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Your best story yet. I really liked the ending.
bear chives
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
great stuff! the ending was a great twist.
mildnomore
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I agree a sequel or even a series is needed here, maybe with an asian girl or a latina?
Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Perfect! I wouldn't mind his fate for a week or two.
blackjack
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
postman
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Very well done, but how did she give him any of the vial when she had drank the last one in her coffee?
heysoos
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Mopey
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
A great example of the Hoist on his own Pitard trope.
Wild Card
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Great story. Love to read more
K
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
J
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
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