The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Annies Ascension
Annie undergoes a treatment for her delayed puberty with awesome results.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Amazing stuff! Really interesting bits with becoming super smart and reprogramming the bots to do the supernatural realistically! I'm really into smart women so the concept of her using her ability to increase her intelligence, and that increase changing her fantasies was pretty cool. I think it kind of escalated a little quickly at the end, it would have been interesting to see her go back to the doctor with basketball tits and super smarts and team up with him to develop her nanobots together, but the story here is great.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

Some problems with the format and one or two typos but otherwise, one of the best stories I've read in a while. I loved the pacing, content, decisions, reactions, events, almost everything- and that the ending didn't let me down.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Even with the (file?) format problems, I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work. I look forward to a sequel.

Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Good story. The visualization scenes were interesting.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

High-quality writing--intriguing take on the nanobot premise. Being a fan of more strictly BE stories, I had to knock down the story a few notches on the BE ratings. The characters were well-developed, but I felt that there wasn't enough realistic story after Annie discovers her abilities. I know that I was eventually going to have to suspend my disbelief entirely, but I find myself wishing my superheroes to be more extraordinary than they appear, and certainly not 15 feet tall.

Other than that, I enjoyed it enough to want to read it again in the future. I think your future in this genre is bright.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

For anyone having problems opening the story with notepad, try using Microsoft word or something similar. It left some odd characters when I did it this way, but it separated the story into paragraphs, thus making it more readable.

As for the story itself, very nicely done.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

IMPOSSIBLE TO READ! Please reformat this story!!!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Defiantly an enjoyable read - I'm looking forward to more of your work.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Formatting problems let this story down slightly as it makes it much harder to read, but otherwise one of the best stories covering this genre I've read in a long time.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Been a while since I've read a pure power fantasy as well put-together as this one. Other than some odd quote-formatting errors (likely an after-effect of using Word's Smart-Quotes 'feature') it's flawless. You even manage to create some dramatic tension after her realization of power, which is sometimes difficult for writers.

One tiny error: "Tina thought of the possibilities!" on the last page -- shouldn't that be Annie thinking of them?

Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Good story, after using word to fix some technical translation difficulties. When opened in Notepad in Windows 7 odd characters replaced ", ', and -'s within the text. It was a quick fix in Word, but hopefully could be avoided in the future.

I'd like to see a sequel that deals with the Dr. a little bit more.

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