A short scene based off of a picture by the one and only test-0. Finding a magic wand allows a bubbly girl's friend to fulfill a fitting fantasy about her.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.67
- Characters: 4.67
- Technical: 4.33
Pleasure4U
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Nekomaster
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Hey Man, I liked this story a lot, I like the idea how she was to heavy to move nor could she talk. I like th idea of a hot girl with her mouth stuck open and unable to talk :)
Please do another one but, well, maybe have it go on a bit longer and stuff, if you want help, email me at nekomaster.max@gmail.com
godofwar5000
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
This was exactly what a short story should be. Effective and not boring. Maybe flesh out the characters a bit more, and add a bit more detail. Detail is key in these shorts. Look forward to a possible sequel. :D
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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