My not-very-awaited-but-here-anyway second story had arrived. This is the tale of three University students who remain there over the Christmas holidays and the expansive adventures they have. Once again, I'm new at this; so please rate it and leave constructive criticism.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.57
- BE: 4.43
- Characters: 4.29
- Technical: 4.00
Stavi
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A fantastic story but I must give you some critism. The growth was a little too extreme. One fourth of a cup causing several feet of breasts is a little too much. And in just an hour they become the size of small cars. To make the story better I think you should slow it down a bit. Maybe small cars after 24 hours. And honestly I don't like the beanbag chair discription because those come in many different shapes and sizes so really if you were going to use that you should be a little more discriptive about it. But overall good work. Much better than some of the other stories posted on this site.
nick
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
A very well organized, methodical and engaging story. I would love to see similar stories like this one. My only gripe about it is that it becomes a little unrealistic. I would have enjoyed it more only if the sizes we're just a bit more believable and that the growth occured over a longer period of time, as well as showing how the characters deal with their changes.
It's still awesome though.
Arhus
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Great story and style, I like the descriptions a lot, especially the lactation and BE.
Apple
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great story, you really did a good job with the multiple perspective.
lah
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Really quite good - I look forward to seeing more from you. A lot of run-on sentences in the beginning, which I found distracting. Bear in mind that I'm enough of a grammar nazi to run screaming from most of what gets posted here, it probably didn't bother most people.
brit
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Please publish your stories as HTML. RTF, DOC, PDF, etc, are all a pain to read.
fourshot
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
very few typos (a miracle for free porn)! I would have liked to see a little more character development, but this was just a short story. all in all a very enjoyable read. I will go on the records as saying that the "bean bag chair" comparison is pretty cliche...lol great job I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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