david_watson@sympatico.ca
Carrie and her friends discover a delicious new fruit that has expansive results. Have fun!
Revised from the original!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 4.20
- Characters: 3.60
- Technical: 3.80
Kam
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
The descriptions were great! very well done in that reguard. I felt as though having the 3 girls one right after the other go through it seemed a little redundant, and disinterested me a little, but a pretty decent story all around, keep up the solid work.
DarkPhoenix
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I am forced to agree about revising the story. I dont care that you did. I dont particular like stories involving a child. But you did revise it because someone else whined.
Genoharden
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Boo! Giving up your first amendment so quickly, I'm hurt!
maybeenuf4u
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Loved it. Love Jamaica mon!
Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Now THAT was spectacular. Thank you very much for removing the disagreeable elements.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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