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As her plans near fruition, Bethany continues to witness Ryu's effect on the people around her. It seems that everyone is finding that special someone.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.67
- BE: 4.67
- Characters: 4.67
- Technical: 5.00
btc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Love the story,but need the payback!!!
Russian Judge
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Your story is one of the best I've read. And I'm glad to see that Ryu is having surprising subsidiary effects on others. However, I am a little disconcerted about Melanie. She doesn't really deserve the vicious revenge that Ryu seems to be setting up for her. She only seems to be a minor bitch, and not deserving to lose her breasts or become a short-dicked boy or whatever. Maybe our story's protagonist needs to learn forgiveness? (A word you rarely hear in BE stories, by the way. Most writers of these stories are vindictive jerks, many of them actually outright hating women.)
harl
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
The plot is going on nicely... keep up the good work.
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