When a tear in our reality forms, it allows a creature with power beyond comprehension to slip through into the real world. It feeds off of the erotic energies created by mankind, and it will do anything to get more – even if it means turning all of humanity into mindless sex slaves! -- Slightly rough, but entertaining nonetheless.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.45
- BE: 3.55
- Characters: 3.82
- Technical: 4.36
Bb47
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Awesome... and then it stops and theres no sequel. Like so many stories on here, the author jerked out a wonderful premise, satisfies an urge, and then crashes into the wall of plot line noncontinuance.
banditkings
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I love that monster! If he could read my mind, poor Sharon. She would be so will fucked by the BIGGEST cock. and have the BIGGEST set of boobs. I'm still hard! Any more? Please have, or write more.
Very Free
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Good story, though short. I echo Apple's sentiments. It seems this genre has been overused, especially the penis growth, which I think isn't a necessity for a good story. I think it would be great if continued story has more on this creature from the tear.
Angry Ginger
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Very nice, simple but interesting storyline, I'd like to read another.
HorseRadish
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Bill Pratt
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Faaaan-tastic! It needs a bit of tuning, but this is an excellent kicker. Please do keep going as time permits.
Superwoo
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Agreed, a little rough, but has REAL potential. It has a good "hook" and once the action starts a nice smooth flow. Please continue, I definitely would like to see what other "enhancements" this entity has in mind! :)
Apple
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Good story. Impressively original considering the spent state of this genre. Please continue your story
Immortal Eternal
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
xarinth
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Great potential with this story and with the writer's style. Can't wait to see what happens next.
fourshot
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
great story, I see a lot of potential in this story line.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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