When two friends, Mark and Rachel, get stuck in the jungle, they stay at a charming little inn and find a most intriguing beverage.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.57
- BE: 3.57
- Characters: 3.14
- Technical: 3.14
Deus-Ex-Machina!
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I am an English major, and I found nothing wrong with this story. It was just to my taste. Your style works well for you. Keep up the good work.
bloke
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
This story was awesome. Don't listen to the haters. I do not read erotic stories for the "grammar" or "style." You get to the sex and growth quickly and you make it very HOT. Keep it up.
Rum
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I agree with the previous mostly positive reviews. The basic plot was good and I really enjoyed the BE method and results. The story definitely felt like it could have used a proofreading by another person to pick up some of the grammar errors and typos that spell-check doesn't pick up. Also the whole thing felt like it could have used a little more polish & depth. It definitely felt like you started out with a great concept and ran out of steam about 2/3rds of the way through and wrapped it up too quickly (though there is something to be said about a good, quick and to the point short story).
I'd definitely be interested in seeing a revised/corrected/lengthened version and/or sequel/continuation. Good job overall.
bobbo
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
writing style is truncated and juvenile.
Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
One of the best I've read in a while. The method of BE isn't completely original, but it's underrepresented and I felt it was given a new angle. Kudos.
cman
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I enjoyed it, although the ending felt tacked on.
brit
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
It reads like a story being told by a 10 year old who is trying to sound adult.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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