The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

EtherealVision
Questionnaire: Christmas Gifts
James and Rebekah get some special gifts for Christmas, to fit their special condition.

This is the Christmas Special, so consider it part 3.5!

Comments are welcome.
Average Scores:

awesome
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Loved the series, there needs to be more!

madmusichatter@hotmail.com
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I liked this story a lot. I cant wait until you continue.
Add me to MSN some time and we can pass ideas back and forth.
mandy

Pleasure
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I enjoy your writing a lot, and am eagerly waiting for the next one !
Thanks for writing, Pleasure.

Kanodin
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

This story is a fantasy, and the mechanism has no limits. The story quickly becomes more surreal and incredible as it goes on. It feels like someone's wet dream--not mine.

Technically, the author expresses him/herself with a disarray of verb tense choices, irritating the reader. Try writing in the past tense, not the present tense. You already wrote the story, so the events are not happening right now.

Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

In good keeping with the rest of the saga.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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