Further adventures with devices from the future that enhance your sex life.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 2.00
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 4.00
Jason G
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Not bad, but everything feels rushed. You could definitely stretch things out (ok, maybe the pun IS intended) and make the story longer. More details about the actual growth instead of just "it went BAM and 2 seconds later he had a 12 foot cock and she had tits the size of cars." No, your descriptions aren't that simplistic, but they could definitely use some more meat. Otherwise you have a great concept and some excellent ideas - just need a little more practice writing. Keep up the good work!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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