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The Overflowing Bra

The Doctor
Freedom's Expansion
Freedom unknowingly purchases a magic bra.
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Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1 
I couldn't get past the first few paragraphs. I can only hope that English isn't your first language. Also, please learn bra sizes. 44dd means she's a really big girl. And I don't mean boobwise. Is that what you intended?
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Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2 
Good overall, just a bit more description, and maybe slow the pace a bit, Though, there isn't anything wrong with a 'quickie'.
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