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The Overflowing Bra

GTortoiSe
gtortoise1@gmail.com
The Investigation of Caley Prentice 1-9
Young Caley Prentice has assets to make just about anyone jealous. Gorgeous, wealthy and incredibly stacked she doesn't seem to lack for anything... except kindness. Can one girl really have it all? Some people don't seem to think so.
Average Scores:

Anka
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I'm glad to find a good attribute theft story. These are so hard to come by! Apart from that, interesting story, really piques my interest. Keep the updates coming!

RP
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Unbelievably good story. I am begging you to continue it. Please. Best BE story by far.

Signal Peak Energy
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 2

GfAQO4 I read and feel at home. Thanks the creators for a good resource..!

D
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

never commented on a story before but this one really deserves it - really good work.

yoda983
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Awesome! Can't wait for the rest of the story

Kam
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Really awesome story, one of the few I have come back to over the moths. cant wait for the next chapters ^_^

willg
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Ecxellent, can't wait for more installments!!

guydaley
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Oh what a web we weave when you make the story that titillating and then leave it unfinished.

topcat37
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

looking forward to the next installment!! Thanks

Greg
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Not just a story with constant BE, but a story that actually has a meaning and a plot. Fantastic :) Great Job

Zin
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This story is great, I can't even think of enough words to describe it, so I'll just go with 'great' for now. Please continue it, you're a genius to say the least. So, yeah...good job, this is the best story I've read in a while.

JigsawMan
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

It's been a long, long time since I was motivated to comment on a story, but this one is outstanding. Please continue in this vein.

Gawdzilla
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Excellent work mate. I really enjoyed the feeling of angsty, defensive teen romance, keep it up!

Me
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Liked it a lot. Can't wait for more.

Kanodin
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Despite the laudable qualities of the characters, I find myself acutely unsympathetic toward Caley. I don't know if this is just a personal feeling, but I get very irritated with wealthy people who evaluate their riches as evidence of unequivocal superiority over others.

Yet, I also recognize that the story is not over. There are a few directions in which Caley can go:

1) Caley is still a teenager, so there is a whole life ahead of her to develop and change her world-view toward the rich and poor people in the story. If the storyline goes on long enough in this universe, we may witness changes in Caley's personal values. Such a development is the mark of truly dynamic characters (i.e., not simply well described and unchanging personalities). This possibility is shooting for the moon, but considering the mature writing style and sophisticated ideas embodied in the story, it is worth considering.

2) Caley's attitude may be a cover for her secret life and behavior. She may, in fact, not think less of people with less fortune than her, yet make everyone around her, even her friends, believe that she is a typical stuck up snob. I do not particularly like this possibility, but I suppose that it is plausible in a cloak-&-dagger way.

3) Caley's attitude toward the world, given her young age, would exhibit extreme changes in the face of dramatic events. Perhaps her money and personal power fails to protect herself in the future, and people in her life teach her to trust and value others. Caley's personal familial tragedy does not fit the bill, partially because it apparently served to enhance her insatiable need for independence.

I quite enjoy the presence of several subtle quirks in the story:

A) Why did Caley pair up with Andy? What does she see in him? Given her celebrity status in school, if she is so disinterested in paupers and loners, what possible force of attraction pulls Caley and Andy together? I think this anomaly is intentional, and would make for a wonderful revelation in later chapters.

B) Who is Caley 'stealing' from? if she feeds off her cohorts, this may possibly reverse her apparent attraction to "popular" people, since the individuals that she victimizes would be the same folks that she "pretends" to hold near and dear.

C) Andy experiences similar gut feelings both when he enters Caley's residence and when he arrives at Ms. Delaney's house. Does this coincidence simply prepare the reader for Andy's reactions? Or, does this feeling indicate something that both Caley and Ms. Delaney have in common--a something that Andy can feel? This would be really fun to develop in later parts of the story.

My only straight-up criticism has to do with a dearth of serious antagonists toward Caley. Nobody in Caley's universe poses a threat to her. In fact, it seems that each person that either confronts or attempts to measure up against her becomes a target of powerful retribution. This type of unopposed power not only threatens the credibility of the existing story, but also jeopardizes the viability of the plot in the future. Clownboat (a rater) indicates the possibility that this may turn out to be like "a lot of other GTS stories", and this warning is valid because many GTS stories place the giantess in all-powerful positions. This story desperately needs a legitimate challenge to Caley, one that has the potential to make her learn know the meaning of humility.

Other than that, I am convinced that the author placed enormous amounts of thought and effort into developing this story. Despite my penchant to discuss rhetorical patterns that make writers responsible for what they advocate in their fictional worlds, this story is easily an exemplar of writing, and worthy of imitation.

belooo
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Loved it, can't wait for the next parts

TB
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Simply amazing storytelling. Best story I've read since Fret Pearson's Neon Pink. And that's saying something. I'm in awe.

Biantai
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

You are an awesome writer! You should do this professionally. It is better than most of what is on television. It would be great to see you in the chat channel.

douche mcgee
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

When it comes right down to it their isn't that many good stories on this site. Lots of excellent BE fiction, but when it comes right down to developing a world and the characters that populate that world their is preciouse little. You get something like this story quite rarely. (Not only on this site but in general.) most stories I don't rate because I'd end up slagging a good portion of them. Not because their not titilating, but because their little more then stroke peices (and some pretty bad at that even (usually because the author lacks experience, and is just doing it on a whim.)) This however is clever, interesting, suspenseful, and has characters that in someway can be related to or at least understood. (if not at all times actually like, although they do grow on you.) The characters are actually developed. (in more then just a physical sense.) The story is well thought out well written and incredibly sexy, (Even if it does seem to be in short bursts.) Put bluntly this story is good because the author took the time and effort to flesh it together and think it out. Not to mention his brilliant use of the tease and the cliff hanger in short, you kick ass, keep up the good work.

Zomb
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Wow. Just wow. I really wasn't sure what I was getting into as this normally does not seem like my style... but damn. I was actually mad when it ended because I want to see more. Please continue this story. It is absolutely great.

Mike
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Very well done. I'm typically not a fan of slow, but this was such a good story, I had to read the whole thing.

Tarquin
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Very, very good - can't wait for the rest of it. What BE there is, is excellent, hope for much more and of staggering magnitude. I think our girl has gotten as tall as she would want to, and her route to domination is now mammary giantism. Many thanks, look forward to next installment.

supermerio
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I would have rated the BE a 6 if possible - if the tension in her bra was a metaphor for the tension between them - genius - if not then naturally excellent writing ability. Good work. Up there with Hunter S Creek for sure.

Duuude
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Very well done. I love the mystery. It could use more BE description and sexual activity. Looking forward to more!

PixelPimp
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Absolutely enthralled by the story. So well written, such good ideas, and agree with Clownboat about the directions. Simply brilliant. Best BE/sg story I have ever come across. Cant wait for more!

TehDewd
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Came for the boobs, stayed for the story.

This is such a great story, not only because it is so well written but because it hits on so many sub-genres of BE, like transfer.

Great story, can't wait for the rest!

Randall Cornelius Wilmington Moss
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This is onehellofa story!! Shure would like to see another chapter. It was just gettin Hot.

Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

More please

mechfan9
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

great job, looking forward to the next chapter.

Guy Incognito
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

LOVED the story, can't wait for the next installments. Just a note, spell-check it (i noticed a few here and there, but nothing major).
Just echoing Clownboats comments, I hope its not headed in that direction, but LOVE the direction its heading in if its not that.

CGMan
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Best read in a long time! I look forward to more!

D-Ano
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I look forward to the next installment.

Sil
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Very excellent story, amazing characters. Definitely intrigued to see what happens to Caley, and what plans she has for our poor (literally) protagonist.

Clownboat
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Amazing characterization. Caley's beginning as an unsympathetic character to one the reader can appreciate is very well done. Her bitchy behavior towards the protagonist is not unrealistic considering all that she has gone through and her love of teasing. I'm just kind of hoping the story doesn't end up like a lot of other GTS stories where the woman becomes some 9 foot tall masculine engine of destruction. Or some kind of Oedipus tale where the male protagonist is treated like a dependent child. However, it doesn't look like the story is going in either of those directions, so yay!

Beetlebomb
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I have not yet read the story, but GTortoise?! Is it really you? People have been dying to have you finish this story for years, but you simply vanished! I really hope this isn't an impostor because there are many many people out there that admire your work. Let us know and hear from you!

Figment
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This is Really Really good, well thought out and a very good plot with a stunning attention details. Wonderfully descriptive, creatively on topic.

Ouroboros
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Wow, what a great story. I can't wait for the next chapter!

duffdog
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I really, really like your writing style and sense of mystery. I hope that you continue with the storyline-- the character development is also well done.

Danath
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Loved it, very well written and the characters are interesting,hopefully more growth occurs when the two main characters are together.

G-man001
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Been waiting for this story to continue for a long time! Very awesome read. Can't wait for some more naked and big knockers!

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