The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Mr. X
While on a vacation to Hawaii, Mary Jane and her roommate Debbie buy a chess set with magical effects!
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Personally, love pregnancy and clothing destruction in these stories, so major boosts there! As for the BE description, well, needs more detail than just cup sizes. When the characters needed to get new clothing, that helped a lot, but all in all, fairly lacking there. To end on a positive note though, this is an excellent concept and story, with no major errors at all!

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

A generous review, but I did think it was a very well done story. The cups can get boring, but honestly, the concept and drive behind it was superb.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

The descriptions need work, and the story fel rushed, but overall very nice.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Loved the story I'm hoping that you continue with the idea. Either a sequel or another story inspired around the same idea.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

Although I enjoyed the actual idea of the story, it needs some work. I agree with whats been said before. The b.e. and pregnancy (which I personally enjoyed) were all based around cup sizes and months and the amount of children. You could have added some depth the the characters. The ending did feel very rushed. But overall, it was a pretty good expansion story. A sequel where some other girls find the board or a continuation of this story would be good too. Hope you continue.
Keep on keepin' on.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

You could definately do a sequel from this, and I'd look forward to it. I'd say to put more description in, and have the characters react more to the "OMG our boobs will be this big forever".

Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

I liked the story, but I rather wish it had left off before the girls find out they are stuck. The tacked on ending was also very forced.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

I enjoyed it.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

A nice little story. Agree with the others about the Cup size growth, its fine, but don't rely on it exclusively. The other thing of note was that even though they gave birth, it was anticlimatic for some reason...maybe there could have been sex or them fooling arouns with each other. You said that the change was pleasureful but nothing came of it. Keep it up! Liked the chess idea.

Wild Card
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

I'm a sucker for magical effects that trigger BE, ...
Having a board game like chess trigger those magic effects where great! The transformation of the actualy BE was short and simply repeated it self over n over. Its has already bin said, growth got shown in cup sizes. Would have bin better if it was mixed or compared with objects like oranges, melons, ballons or vollyballs for instance...
The characters could have had a bit more detail and depth, in this story the had a name and a short disription of there looks and that was it.

Never the less, I like the overall story it was some thing new and not the usual Magic Ring, Powder or drink.
Keep on writting and spice up the details on the BE n character description for the next story.

Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

Very predictable and boring. The descriptions were always "#-cup", never anything else. The size changes near the end didn't make much sense, either.... Towards the end it felt rushed and bland. Bleh.

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Overall, I liked it, however the sizes just eventually failed to register with me. I'm probably crazy but beyond a certain size, it just gets boring.

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