The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Anonymous
TheClause2007@yahoo.com
Made For Each Other
It’s my first try at this – see if you like it.  
Average Scores:
 Taishi
Overall= 2, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 2 
I was so confused about what to buy, but this makes it unrlestandabde.
 ragnaroc
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2 
 Focus more on the grammar. But overall, not my kind of BE story.
 Aryan Man
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4 
it was a mediocre story, with some spelling mistakes. it's sickening how you focused on the guy getting inhumanly fat, fucking americans. 
 D
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4 
Cute little story, I'd flesh out the end a little and slow it down, it moves a little too quick.
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