The Overflowing Bra

Not a big Star Trek fan, but I saw this mentioned on the boards, and decided to give it a read. It's not terrible; I think I like it more because the BE is self-controlled. The characters' reactions are a little wooden and not entirely believable- I'm thinking that the crew of Voyager has come across scarier things than a pair of giant boobs. 
On the whole, it was titillating, but not a great read, probably because it had so many cooks. There were ome grammar issues as well, but probably for the same reasons. 
I'd like to see what you come up with yourself.

A few typos/ grammatical errors but good overall.  Some of the expansion needs more detail.

Needs more seven of nine, preferably gangbanged.

The writing is ok, but I could replace the names of every character to any random name and it would be the same story. It can't even be considered Star Trek.

It was decent. It wasn't the drek that you sometimes see when people attempt a multi-authored work of fan-fiction, but it wasn't something that'll, y'know, change the face of this community forever. I think that next time, maybe it'd be better to look over the technical stuff first before submitting, cause some people are real sticky about that.
Also, I might be repeating something already said, but some of it IS a little bit out of character for the people being portrayed.

Lots of punctuation and grammar errors bothered me, but I liked the story because it's a Star Trek story.  Shame that Star Treek is being forgotten.

I think I'm just getting jaded but I found this story kind of lifeless and I'm a Star Trek fan.  I don't know, part of the problem is the speech syntax of the characters didn't seem to be 'in character'.

not the best story i have read, very little to get excited about.

Pretty good. Story flows well, eventhough there are several writers there is no apparent change in style between the chapters. My only gripe is that it is too short.