The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

one eyed jack
Welcome Home (rough draft)
Jake returns home to some.. changes.

This is my first BE story attempt, so I'd sincerely appreciate any feedback. Thank you.
Average Scores:

toymaker
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

The writing style was good; I liked the setup, but I'm not a big "shrinking man" fan. In fact, it kind of put me off of the story entirely. That, and I got a little confused with what was going on when the second girl showed up. But I'm the only one so far who didn't really like it, and like I said, it's not really my thing, so keep working what you got.

This is Me
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Phenomenal. I normally don't keep these stories downloaded on my computer, but this one's sticking around on my disk.

Your Nickname
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

like they said

Blamandude
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

AAAAAAH You just had to stop it there! Definetley my type of story, Im praying you write more!!

TehDewd
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Excellent story. As has already been said, don't stop. I can't wait to read the next part!

bear chives
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

this was really great. your ideas here were excellent. The main thing i'd offer is that your physical descriptions are a bit confusing, so i'm not sure exactly what's happening sometimes. With a shrunken man story, (which i love) it's important to be clear about exactly the guy is in relation to the woman, since the situation is so outside our everyday experience (at least for most guys i know ;)

but yea, this story did an excellent job of getting the reader exactly where he wants to be: in a boob sandwich.

Stretch
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Don't you dare stop, my friend. This is an excellent read. The playfulness of the girls, the situation and desciptions are wonderfull.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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