Our hero finds that maybe he overlooked some things as the growth gets a little out of control.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.71
- BE: 4.71
- Characters: 4.14
- Technical: 4.43
007
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Megan should use the I phone to make her friends grow more, or have her friends fuck her brother to get bigger. whatever you do, just write more growth scenes!
buddyu
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I love the story so far. I hope that she keeps the iphone and uses it herself.
Hell-scythe
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Very enjoyable ride. I have to agree with the rest. Conquring the world sounds good and all, but it there are other forces at play. The phone's address list (quite assuming) proves that. Now I'm not sure I would snag a "well known" wizard, but having somebody intervene would be good. Could be her friends, her brother or a new character. The thing to think about, from what you have told us so far about your world is that magic is there, just not common. This would mean that Meg by no means would had been the 1st to try something like this before, otherwise magic would be commonly known in your world. So what is keeping magic in check? That would be the real question to ask yourself.
I hope my rant helps. Keep writing.
gman1
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
This have been a great series, I love that he uses his cum (my favorite transformation method) and that a giantess appears, but like the first guy says...it needs to go in a new direction. He gets bigger (how?) he grows a friend to stop her (who?) whatever you do keep writing. I'd be happy to help you bounce ideas or edit. Great work
Rex
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Good so far, hopefully it gets an interesting twist since I've seen countless giantess-taking-over stories. A change from that would be good, though right now there doesn't seem to be any sign of it deviating from this. Maybe some other device comes into play to mix things up.
Stretch
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
On a personal level I've never cared for the incest idea but other than that the story is superb. You really have some great writing skills my friend.
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Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
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