milkmaniac@yahoo.com
This is part 1 of my new story. I hope you enjoy it, and I welcome any comments at milkmaniac@yahoo.com
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.71
- BE: 4.29
- Characters: 4.57
- Technical: 4.81
BB47
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Fucking awesome. Everyone needs to read this!
Mclovin09
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
the story was great . but i want to know about the other campers and will brynn get amy pregnant?
Sucker4Boobs
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great story. It's cool that the girls are hentai fans.
dd_lover
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I normally cower from stories with (shem) but it was a minor part of the story, and the BE was great. The anticipation was awesome! What happens next? Are there more people at the camp?
calfee
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
good to see you writing again. I can't wait for the rest.
DHoose
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent. The story had a slow start, but that start was full of character details and development. The end also makes it very apparent that the story is only 'part 1' and it is only going to get better from here.
*cough*hiddensurveillance*cough*
hug
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
If you can pull out the second part, and go further without loosing reality, it could turn out to be a classic !
keep them on the edge !
IML
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Must...see..part 2!
Awesome story, please continue.
CUNTFUCK
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
i like your style.
i would have loved if the BE was more drawn out.
also, i hope one of the unseen campers turns out to be a mini-GTS.
Devils-assistant
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
if the be was slightly slower..
great story tho
DarkHeart
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
A well written story, would've loved to have seen more attention given to the BE, also kind of curious about the other "residents" of the camp.
brit
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
fantastic, this is old school BE the way its meant to be! Only criticism is that the be was just too late in the story, and then too quick. Would have loved to see some spread around.
ice0wl
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Good description, hope to see the next part soon
Jason G
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent writing style, great imagery, and very realistic (well... you know what i mean). Keep up the good work!
Robbi
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
excellent story looking forward to part 2
Hell-scythe
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Very good. Please, keep writing.
Blamandude
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Excellent! I really enjoyed it.
CooKIE!
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
mercury
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Perhaps Brynn can grow more too?
Very good. look forward to more
ravenlord
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Im glad to see you writing agin. Keep up the good work.
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
A good start, keep up the good work!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
Due to comment spam, any new posts with http in them will be destroyed.
