The Overflowing Bra

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needed a lot more description,which would have made a much better story.grammar was off a lot.

love it
add more and tell the shower paryt at the end

Nice start on a story- let it sit for a while and add on to it someday.

Loved it.

Overall, above average compared to the many other stories I've read in the past. Keep it up.

One of the best new stories in a while. Fairly original. Hope this becomes a series.

I like the fact that she shrinks without water -- it gives you more scope for plots than just your standard continuous growth.  The characters can experiment with different sizes.
It would have been nice to know *why* the goth person cursed her, that was a missing element.  We should have been shown that scene, or had Ally explain it.
I agree with what other commentators have said too -- especially about the fainting.  Once was enough.
But overall a nice, fun story.  Write more!

Pretty good story, definitly worth continuing but it needs 2 things id say, 1) a sex scene 2) dont have ur characters fainting so much

I Liked it, it could have used a sex scene though.

good stuff

Like you said, it could have done with a little proofreading and editing, but it was WAY better than some of the drivel I see posted on here.  I had no trouble getting to the end of the story, and like others have said, it was indeed a good one.  Flexible story line, lots of room for sequels/add'l chapters, and it really could go almost anywhere.  Keep it up!

Could use more spellchecking, but it definitely deserves to continue. 

Good start, and a very flexible story line, lots of potential.
Needs better proof-reading and the growth could be a little more descriptive.
Character interaction needs fleshing out, every time it got difficult one of them fainted and skipped all the interaction.

Very well done Var, if this is your first work, as you say, then I am very impressed. It seems as though we share some similarities in our taste of fantasy women! Btw, Epilogue, not Prologue lol. I enjoyed this very much and hope you keep on writing.
Dr Know

Not bad at all.  Some descriptions could be better, but overall I liked it.

Thanks, I would like to say that I am sorry for the few Technical errors that you may come across.  I got so excited when I got done,  I sent it in without doing a final check.  Silly things like that always get me.  

It was awesome, I definantly think you need to continue, but with much more water , like she goes into the ocean....=)