The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Lisa L.
Warlock's Revenge, A
Linda and her friends piss off Damion, a Warlock, and are transformed.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

I realy enjoyed this story. It was right up my alley with the TG and multiple breasts. Other than the grammatical problems I give this story 2 huge thumbs up.

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2

you got a lot of the characters names wrong. you messed up who was who way too much. you need to proofread it. if you did that it would be a good story.

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2

Sorta good plot-wise. Needs serious work with grammar, though spelling was pretty accurate. Always remember, sentences start with a capital letter, so do names, and dialogue goes in quotes and also should have the first letter capitalised. Sorry, I'm really picky about basic grammar and punctuation... But I hope this helps you to improve.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

Needs work grammatically, and with some descriptions, but the sex was very enjoyable.

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