The Overflowing Bra

I just want to let you people know that I agree that the story is pretty shallow... well, entirely shallow... and yup: crap.
This is the first time I'd ever written for such a topic and next time I'll make sure it doesn't suck or lack any depth whatsoever. In short, thanks for your comments and I'll try much harder in future.

I thought the amount of growth description was good.  The characters and story could have been more compelling and immersive.  Overall not bad.  

Well, I guess you can get off to it if you could stand the horrid writing.  Not the worst story I ever read but it was still pretty bad.  It seemed like a junior high kid from a foreign country wrote this.

not very good overall and the ending seemed off
how did they move her didnt anyone notice 2 HUGE breasts destraying the building ...

I'll add one to that.  Why didn't they just reverse it?  You put a formula for shrinking in the book.  Place the gun in the first act, forget it was there in the second?

The story seemed abit rushed and alot of details skipped over. The B.E. descriptions were repetative. I think the auther just needs to slow down a bit.

Not the best story, but far from the worst.  The author probably needs to invest in an office suit like Microsoft Word or the free OpenOffice.org.  That, and keep practicing!

Some of these comments are a bit unfair, given the trash that has occasionally washed up on the shores of OFB. The reality is that this is more of a scene than a story; there's little character development and lots of growth, something which I can appreciate as a BE RPer. It would be nice if there was some more depth and relationships, but this story is just as good as any of 'The Tycoon's' stories. Short, enormous expansion, and the enjoyment of the growing character. No gross cup violations or dramatic transition erros.. extremely palatable for it's file size. I would rather have more submissions like this than a 200k novela which takes three chapters to get to the first hint of BE and blows my evening of movies or gaming.

Not the worst story, but also far from the best.  Nearly no characterization - people stopped being people after a few paragraphs, and it really turned into a description of how big the breasts were getting.  And that's it.  The descriptions and writing weren't "sexy" enough to carry that alone, so it just seemed sort of distant.  It would be salvageable with a few go-overs and revisions, but as is...meh.