Forced as a test subject in a secret government plan, plain-looking Rachel gains the ability to transform herself into a stunning sex goddess.
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Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.83
- BE: 3.17
- Characters: 2.83
- Technical: 3.83
Sucker4Boobs
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A BE story with killing AND sex? Nice one!
HeSop
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
It's a fun little story but it's pretty generic and not very detailed... and little to no character development at all. Written well enough though. Keep at it!
Jho
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Not bad, you show lots of promise, just flesh out your story a bit more and give better descriptions.
CTBK
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Enjoyed your story, can't wait for next installment
Anon
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
this is a great start - good grammar and spelling, flow is good, but the "scenes" are a little short and could use some more detailed descriptions. this is a great first couple of chapters to the story though, so keep it up! looking forward to the next couple of chapters!
Vaelon
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
As usual, someone beat me to my punch-lines. Anon summed up my comments. Enjoyed your story, can't wait for next part.
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