A gem, truly. The only downside of such an artfully written short story is that one almost loses sight of the BE! A '4' on BE in this really only assumes I havent read the perfect story yet. the scenes were short but concise and in keeping with the buildup of the plot; any more in excess would have ruined the dynamic. Characters breakdown two ways here. This is reminiscint of Bradbury in the sense that we're given very little background on the protagonist and yet we gain a strange familiarity with him. However, the secondary characters seem to play a bit heavy on stereotype for my taste, though that may be splitting hairs. Technically, the flow of the story had me from the start. You've taken an intriguing concept and executed it very well. again, the rise and fall of tension is well orchestrated and the play of stark reality with fantasy keeps one just behind the curtain. It's refreshing to read a focused tale with a dramatic climax (no punn intended). Finally I'd have to really proof this story to pluck out any technical errors (if there are any), so '5'. Beyond that, the diction is colorful but not excessive, provocative but not vulgar, just right. Bravo.
I think it is a bit too short, it needs more BE, and reasons for the happenings need to be at least hinted at.
this is possibly the cleverest story i have read. my only criticism is that the main character is a bit too frantic through out. but the morphs are all really hot, so who cares!!
This is awesome. The what and the how are so completely out there with absolutely no explanation of why, that the insanity works. Thiss would look brilliant illustrated (with the right illustrator, of course)
Size: perfect. Number of enlargements: excellent. All it needed was a bit more description of the actual growth to get the full 5.
The main character is likeable and well described within the confines of a short story; although I have to say it's really hard to write your way to a five in characterization in a piece of erotic fiction.
Very fine, with only a couple of unnecessary passives.
Good quality, but why is he so upset?