The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

William Pratt
G.M. Foods
Average Scores:

tk421
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

:D

aqrkfbxe
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

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barbie
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

The story was too long. I thought the character could have been developed more - personality wise - but anything with gov agents with secrete ajendas is always catchy.

hohohaha
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

What an enjoyable read, I would be thrilled if you would work towards a short novel!

Stretcherr
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

really sexy stuff, i liked all the characters, although it might have been advisable to not use bothe carrie and kari, it was confusing.

if i had one gripe, it was too many parallell story lines, but that was far eclipsed by your totally hot erotic imagery.

nice work.

DarkHeart
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Have to agree with Stretcherr, the story was hot and sexy, as well as a fun romp. Liked the references to other BE stories. There were a few spelling errors as well as confusion with what you were calling some of the characters, but it didn't detract that much. Would love to see more.

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