The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

the character development is good but I agree that the description of the BE needed work

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I didn't mind the addiction part; the only problem that I had with it was the way it fully came out with the therapist at the end. The concept of addiction is a little scary, it ultimately destroys her "life," but on the whole, I found the story compelling.

The descriptions of the BE were a little light in my opinion, at times it was hard for me to keep track of how big she was, or was getting- saying that she had a 90-inch bust only confused me, because I kept trying to figure out where her ribcage ended up in the equation.

On the whole, I didn't find the story as bad as people are saying; it *did* have its faults, but I like your style of writing and this piece was more than simple fapping material. Good job.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

A good story right up to the end, but I think it could have used a bit more BE description: "bigger than x" seems like kind of a lazy way to describe what's going on, although it still achieves a good effect.

Bill Pratt
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5


The first half or so of Chocoholic, I liked a lot. The second half I very nearly hated. It tried to make addiction funny. Call it a squick, but addiction's not that funny to me.


Big boobs and a bit of breast play. It's too slow to really kick me where I really like it, but ... That's the way it is sometimes. In spite of that, this would probably be a four with a bit more description.


While the plot disturbed me greatly, I can't really say anything bad about the characters and characterization


A polished display with few unclear moments. It's a pretty big story, though, so a couple minor errors are allowed.
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

really well written. the characters start out strong, but you write yourself into a corner with the plot. i agree that that addiction is disturbing.

overall though i did find most of it very sexy.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I enjoyes the personalities you gave to the charecters. The situation the main charecter was put into was thought out quite well.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

more descriptions

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I also dislike how the story evolved. The end is very disappointing.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Me, I like it slow. Not too slow; this was just about right, and the characters were more or less believable

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I like this stile! A+

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