A depressed, slightly obsessive man steals a Sub-Quantum Arousal Energy Redirection Device and goes off to find Emily, his long lost love.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.80
- BE: 4.20
- Characters: 4.27
- Technical: 4.67
Bb47
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
meri
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
The best story I've read recently - well written, the subtle humor is good.
so many great storys
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
great story keep it up cant wait till the others come out
superb
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
superb story... love the concept of the girl growing because the guy is so turned on... can't wait to see what happens in the next part....
IceOwl
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Good story, even if it happens to strangely coincide with a story idea I recently had o.@
Please continue!
good
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Foxmaster5
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great story and I loved how the Be took place. keep up the good work.
Sinister Twin
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
This'll probably sound repetitive, but this is a fantastic story! I suppose it helps that you combined growth with the BE, which are my 2 favorite fetishes. I'm certainly looking forward to the next installment.
Who
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Thanks for the story. Neat concept...curious to see where you go with it...
hesitation
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This is great. I love how the story progresses and how the BE actually happens. The fact that there's also body growth is absolutely fantastic. Good job!
MrHHH
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really hope this story gets finished!
VitaminC
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great start! More more more!
Wolf
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Very good start!I can't wait for the promised continuation ^^
Bill Pratt
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Overall
I really liked this one. The story flows, the characters aren’t cardboard, the grammar didn’t make me want to consume human flesh, and the girl got a body and libido make-over. Very nice.
BE
The BE is pretty light, being neither huge nor hugely over-rendered, but this scores big in general body modification. And heck, compared to may around here, I like my girls small. The growth is the thing and boobs grew (along with a few other things).
Characters
The dialogue is smooth, so the characters come off feeling like real people. There is room for a expansion, and there is practically no character evolution, but what do you expect in 4500 words?
Technical
The usual bits of dropped punctuation here and there, but nothing jolting. Basically it’s at the nitpicking level.
Elbee
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Whoa!
Great job! Thank you so much for sharing!
You got it all right...especially with hints of what may come. I almost don't want to go to the next one...preferring to live in the middle of his all!
Thank you!!!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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