bjhaberman@prodigy.net
It was a beautiful summer day in Goshen, Connecticut. Woodridge Lake was quiet, and so was the house. Mom and Dad were going to be in Hartford for tonight and most of tomorrow... and I was bored out of my mind. Emphasis on was. That was the day my inner child wept with joy. That was the day I discovered that magic was real.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 3.50
- Technical: 3.50
tgape
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Not much there yet, but definite potential. Some small grammar issues, but overall not bad.
MajorJ
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I agree with tgape, excellent potential. A great start.
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