Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.71
- BE: 1.43
- Characters: 2.43
- Technical: 2.71
Prism
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
I would like to see more of the story written before posting, also why is it split into two text files? People, please if your story is less than 10 pages there isn't really a need for two files. Although the story is fairly well written, I would like to see more development, of the characters both in the character concept, and physically.
Dinner
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
I also don't understand why this is separated into two text files. Also, where are the paragraphs? More importantly, where is the BE! You uploaded your story too quickly--you should have waited until you were done so the concept would be complete. However, I don't think I've ever seen a BE fic that used *male* hormones, so I'm rather interested.
Chevy Chase
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
It has potential, should have been finished though.
I can see a quality in there and I'm quite looking forward to reading the finished story.
zzzzz
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Great, so Jane's all tingly. What cliches are next?
Anon
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
It's a good start, but like the others have said, there's no need to break it into seperate files. just put a few line breaks and call it a new chapter, and keep going. good start - keep it up!
Yang-Tzee
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Did not care for this one at all
Benji Dude
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
It's a start, needs formatting into paragraphs and there needs to be some BE in there as well, her nipples getting all tingerly (although nice to read about) doesn't really get the blood flowing.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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