The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Derob Jacobs
deejake@gmail.com
Changes and Alterations
Christine was tired of being "the girl with the great personality." Her friend Phil can change all of that, but will Christine like what the changes do to her life?
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 DarkHeart
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4 
Good story, could have used a bit more description in the BE department and the ending was a tad more gruesome than I expected (or liked). Wouldn't mind seeing more, just with a slightly different type of ending. ;)
 Benji Dude
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3 
A nice story, lacking in BE description and not the nicest ending ever.
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