cheviot@cheviotsplace.com
Nothing is as it seems when two sisters move to Baltimore and meet the locals.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.73
- BE: 4.64
- Characters: 4.45
- Technical: 4.18
Kunushi
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I don't usually rate or review stories but I just had to for yours. It was amazing from a sexual standpoint and from a demonic standpoint. My favorite works are ones about demons and satanic things like that because they scare me, but in a good way. This piece of work is amazing and aside from a few name and grammer mistakes I loved it THOROUGHLY!
Kanodin
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very good story. Only two improvements are: (1) Make the garbled speech of people with their mouths full easier to understand, and (2) fix the few grammatical/spelling oversights. However, these only amount to afterthoughts when I consider the holistic quality of the story. Thank you.
andrat2000
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Wow, this is a great BE story. I have only for technical quality a improvement suggestion. On scences with changing the story locations and with a lot of people it seems for me that the story was a kind of mixed up.
nada
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Always love Cheviot's stuff, just found myself wanting a little more expansion/description of same. Otherwise, great as usual.
bnguy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
001zlnv
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I liked the contrast between the transformation of the controled milk dolls and the moms of the apocolypse.
The Toymaker
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
A very interesting concept, expanded (pun intended) in an equally interesting manner. A few grammatical problems, and the large cast of characters was a *wee* bit confusing, but on the whole, very enjoyable.
Jealousy
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
An entertaining adaptation of 'The Lost Boys'. What this story lacks in originality, it makes up for with the quality of your transition from the Santa Carla/vampire story to Baltimore/BE. Your presentation of Mandy and Candy's relationship is commendable for its completeness without impinging on the story itself.
From a technical perspective, the story moves with a very jerky gait. Smoother transitions between scenes would be a notable improvement.
mokmok
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I loved this story. Besides the few grammatical errors that were present it didn't really detract from the story for me. The milk dolls were a very interesting facet of the story.
GAMMA!
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Cheviot just turns me on .he could print the alphabet and i would get giddy....LOL!
Joce
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
A bit difficult to follow at time but the imagery generated by this story is SO powerful, so erotic.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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