A Short scene involving a Girl whos boobs grow for no told reason. She spends the night having fun with herself. A BE scene for lactation fans.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.38
- BE: 3.25
- Characters: 2.63
- Technical: 3.38
EvilJoker
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I thought this was a very nice story in fact I would definitly enjoy hhaveing more like these perhaps longer ones.
Jay
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Pretty good. "Expand" on the idea some more and you'll really have something!
vash
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
really needs work there is almost no plot no real plot just a litle growth and lactation. work on it. mabey better description and a reason behind the growth
IceOwl
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
A decent short story, although a little too short.
FlashBigger
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
Very short, but with good imagery. Writing style flits between ambiguous and over descriptive. Work on consistency. All in all, a great start.
lord_fuzz
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Nice story, keep working on these ideas.
Joce
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Enjoyable, especially the lactation element.
FalseProfet
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Need to be a bit longer, but the description and overall grammer is good.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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