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Keiko likes a good mystery, but can she discover who is attempting to enslave her best friend Janey without becoming a slave herself?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.89
- BE: 3.67
- Characters: 5.00
- Technical: 5.00
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Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
K
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
One of the best stories i've ever read.
Chase
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
bier
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Really awsome! Lavk of BE is not a problem because of the slave theme I really enjoyed. It absolutely makes sense in this story and such a thing for free... thanks!
nobody
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Although there's not much BE in this story, the plot is really great. This is one of the mind-control classics, and trying to figure out (with the protagonist) what's going on is a great challenge. The BE described is very nice, but the main turn-on from the story is clearly the mind control. The characters are perfectly drawn and very engaging. The narrator, unlike those in many mind-control stories, is particularly likeable. We really do get involved in the mystery. Small touches enhance the realism of the characters as well.
Kanodin
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I remember this story from 2002. Read it: it's a classic.
JRParz
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This story is a Hall of Fame Read!
Machiavelli
Overall= 5, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
In terms of praise, you've written a rather good mystery story that kept me interested--so interested that I couldn't put the thing down even when no BE was in sight. The characters were intriguing, conversations were well done, and I was especially impressed with the Middle English sections.
My strongest criticism is the lack of any BE, sex, or anything overtly sexually related through the first 3/5's of the story. If not for the quality of the mystery, I would not have gotten to the BE--which is described well, but it is all lumped together in only one section of the story.
In all, wonderful piece, I enjoyed reading it, but too little BE amidst a very, very long story.
Gaffenheimer
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This is another true masterpiece. It was paced broadly; there wasn't ever too much happening at once. It's always good to have someone witnessing their friend transform. Look who I'm talking to.
You should keep writing stories; they are the greatest. Your talent hasn't diminished at all.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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